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Heavy thoughts entice these tears of solitude from a willing mind 
    
    fed with remnants of love, 
    these tiny omens flow
    ever so
    unforgiving

and take away the false sense of grace and glory achieved

    the absence of ... leaving me
    broken and useless
    as I were before

without purpose, this energy, this wasted heart must surely die
   
    and with its death,
    my tears will stain your memory
A poem about a person who still is in love with someone who used them badly. 2013 description: An old one I'm actually pretty proud of, considering who I was back then and who I am now. (Why is there no self-punching emoticon? :stare:

Edit: 5/21/2013 Changed some line divisions and corrected some embarrassing lack of grammar. 11/13/2013 Changed line divisions and format once again.
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes.
Yes.
Yes.
Yes.
Yes.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
I'm glad you agree. :stare: Also, thank you for the many faves and helpful input. :salute: :iconromanlaplz:

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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! I try, even though I don't actually know that much about poetry :shrug:

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Maybe I wouldn't favourite so much if you weren't so great.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
:XD: Believe me, you help me out a lot. :iconsquishhugplz:

Ohh sneaky. :stare: You're the one who's great.
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh please, :iconohstopitplz: all I do is favourite and make nonsensical comments that complain about the absolute dearth of adjectives I have at the ready.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Hehehehe, but it's so nice. :D
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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Rajami Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is even more beautiful, that the last one. Thank you for writing this...I can feel the passion so raw, I love it in all honesty, good job amigo! :)
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Thank you so much! :la: I'm really glad it had such an impact. ^_^
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