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Revenge, so clearly now, is
a pleasing shade of red.
I remove my hand 
and 
cloak my head
under gathering darkness.

A
Drop
Of my
Blood 
Falls 
To the
Ground.


I watched your downward fall
and now turn my face,
heart beating fast
as
I stride away,
not touched at all.

Breaks
The soil
Never to
Be found.


Your eyes told many secrets,
I knew them well.
Black letters
were
written as you fell
into fathomless depths.

A single
Drop not
More nor
Less, yet 
Still in
Time and
No regret.


There will be no funeral
nor eternal rest
for this cold
soul.
Time's belabored guest
to linger always after all.

Open
Wide
The 
Heart.

A sort of mash-up with ~SebastianGrimm's amazing piece, The knife. His words are in italics, mine are normal. I envisioned two characters here: a (righteous?) vigilante type, who carries out the assassination, and the individual who is killed.

Edit: 11/22/2013 Made the format more uniform, and added/changed a few words.
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L-Inque Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Awsome!
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
Thank you! :)
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vampiresballad Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013
wonderful^^
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013
Thank you. :)
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vampiresballad Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013
you're welcome^^
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Student General Artist
It was interesting :) I didn't quite get the two-characters thing, though. Idk, the italics bit didn't really seem like a victim's thoughts, more like... third-person omniscient, I guess? :shrug:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
:XD: That's okay. I just came up with the idea as I was reading and ran with it. It wasn't even necessarily something I needed to mention in the description, but you know how you it is when you get those...uh...goosebump-inducing visuals, I guess? :lol: 
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13th-ZodiaK Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Mm, I know just how you feel Cat nods
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
:D :iconbestbuddiesplz:
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InDecentSeas Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Morbidly lovely.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013
From you Sir, that is quite a compliment. :iconbowplz: Thank you.
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InDecentSeas Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Look at you complimenting while humbly accepting a compliment. Thank you as well.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
I'm sneaky that way. :paranoid: You're welcome. 
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SirWombat14 Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very deep and twisted.I like the style it is written in too
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hypermagical Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
Thank you so much! ^_^
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SmokeyDan13 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow holy shit... that was an amazing mix, awesome job
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
Thank you so much! :D
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SmokeyDan13 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
really great job there :)
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SmokeyDan13 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sorry i havent looked at your stuff sooner then lol :)
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
np, there's only so many hours in the day :pat:
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SebastianGrimm Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:Q____________ I'm practically drooling
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
:iconheheplz: That is a good thing, right? lol Thank you so much! ^_^
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SebastianGrimm Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yep :D
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
:D
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ravingroshie Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love the way you structured it, what a great read!!:D
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
Thank you so much! ^_^
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TheGirlAtWindyCoves Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing! :shocked:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
Thank you so much!!! ^_^
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