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truth is
I am not your
perfect imitation  
of ends the means could justify
I lie 

I speak  
where words would make  
silence beg "bravery  
is much like a run-on sentence"
speak not.

keep these
memories in 
between your left index  
finger and thumb when feeling numb,
release

feelings 
that will warm you
in the winter, chill your 
bones in a summer heat. lonely
letters

to be
dried like petals,
jailed by secrets written
in some guilty tome. prodigy
undead.
Um. I can be cheesy, okay?

I'm participating in the December Form Challenge. (Believe it or not, I used to write exclusively in fixed form! :omg:) Today's form is the Cinq-Cinquain. :la: 


"Today" is day 6.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
This is anything but cheesy.

The first and last verses really resonate with me. I think I could capture those two alone and study them, a continual fascination for all the things they dont say and do.

And these lines:

"to be
dried like petals,
jailed by secrets written
in some guilty tome.
:iconbowplz:


I find myself quite often blessed and envious of your words.
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:iconhypermagical:
hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
It's full of cheddar. :stare:

Thank you. The amount of ambiguity I leave in my writing could usually be seen as a bad thing, but then there's folks like you who appreciate it for one reason or another.

In all seriousness though, you are one of a few people whose comments I always look forward to. :heart:
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
I have seldom come across poems where knowing what its about has added depth- I personally prefer to have things ambiguous so I can gather my own meaning as well as try to see what the writer intended.

In all seriousness though, you are one of the few writers who is consistently interesting and striving for excellence. It makes for a wonderful anticipation
 
But thank you- I just like to try to match what the writer makes me feel.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013
I could totally imagine you investigating a poem like it was a murder mystery. :lol:

:stare: I will keep on striving then.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013
lol
Some of them drive me batty when I cant even figure out how they make me feel outside of confused.
UnspecifiedUnknown writes like that way too often. I almost always feel stupid when I read her work.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013
Lol, there are a few writers on this site that always have me using the dictionary when I'm reading their work. >:D But it's always a total aha moment when context and everything comes together and something makes sense for the first time. 
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014
I seldom get that Aha! moment. Usually, its more of a gradual understanding or an appreciation for the beauty of the words and phrases and how they are strung together. If the meaning becomes clear its just an additional bonus.
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kiwi-damnation Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013   Writer
:D Nice :D
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
Thank you. :la:
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Inverted-Shadows Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww but I like cheese! Pepperjack pls!
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